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[离任作者] 【锦瑟为谁而鸣】合集(正传+番外1-15)

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这篇文章有不少亮点,是一篇好文章。提两点后续发展和完善的建议:
1、对女主角沈潞的凌辱好像还不够。比如描写王柏对沈潞的凌辱情节太少,只描写了第一夜;又比如凌辱她的都是较高档次的人,最好再加入低层次人对她的凌辱,如艳照等证据被小人物掌握,也可以考虑王柏沦落为小流氓,她无奈再次被人控制,只能忍辱负重,越陷越深。
2、那个美丽的空姐兰茵琪可以成为第二个女主角,她的沉沦过程将成为这篇文章的第二个高潮,两位女主角可以用适当的线索联系起来,被同一个(或一帮)小人物所控制。
3、再将全文整合一下,就更完美了。
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